My writing goal

My writing goal so far this term has been to… describe my ideas in enough detail using strong words so that my readers understand what I mean and can paint a full picture in their minds of what we are describing Here is my piece of my writing about rain. How do you think I ´m going with my goal? Drip, drop, drip, drop… silence, suddenly it started to rain, It looked like as if a giant was stomping on the roof !! WOOSH, WOOSH, BOOM! I felt scared in my classroom but was wondering how the rain falls down from the sky. After I was looking at the window, I felt like I was smelling a soaked clothes that haven´t been washed for ages!! After the school was finished, me and my friend was waiting for my mum to come. … ¨Finally my mum came¨ I said to myself. We were trying to get inside the car not to get wet. Through the car window I could see the rain blur around.